Spy Hunt in D.C., by Max Connelly

A short story set in the aftermath of Spyhunt in Dixie.

Genre: Espionage thriller

Length: < 6000 words

Rating: 3 stars

If you have a keen eye you might notice that I reviewed this short previously in the post short stories as a marketing tool?‘  I suggested that it needed some editing, and the recently author got in touch with me to ask for a re-review.

I previously gave it 1 star mainly due to poor editing, and although the current story is still far from perfect, there have been some major improvements.  As I said before, the story showed promise, but needed the help of a friendly editor.

This short sees a double-agent, Arthur Archibald, about to be handed over to his superiors at the British Embassy in Washington.  What follows is a rather complex sequence of events following his attempt(?) at escape. At the end of the day it is a short story, so there is little room for character development but plenty of scope for action, which is what the author aims to deliver.

So why 3 stars?  I find the writing style is sometimes more complicated than it needs to be (but this is a personal opinion) and I would prefer the dialogue between characters to be more believable.  For example, some of the expressions used by the British agents are either verbose or not common to the UK.

That said, this short works well as a standalone.  In the spirit of avoiding spoilers the opener works well; being set from the protagonist’s point of view in a hopeless situation.  As the story unfolds however, he is soon presented with an opportunity for escape, which slowly unfolds, leaving the reader to guess each character’s motives.  Therein lies the ‘hook’ – Will Archie escape, and if so, how?

See also:

– Reviews: Some general rules

– Short stories as a marketing tool?

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